Friday, November 30, 2007

MAY – OCTOBER 2007 SCREENPLAY CONTEST FINALISTS: The Writers Place

The Writers Place is pleased to announce our finalists for the full-length and teleplay/short competitions for May through October 2007. We do confess, this was an extremely difficult decision. There were so many finely rendered scripts in both categories. Selection of the winners and honorable mentions will be even more difficult. Finalist are, in no order of preference:

Full-Length Screenplays:

Actor Cordell – Widow’s Island
Alan Armstrong – Preemptive Strike
Alexandre Moors – Americana
Alexandria Natapoff – The Partnership
Alexia Maura – Blood Lawns
Betty Saarinen – Doraybus, The Story of a Dog
Charlie Brown – Neighborhood Graves
Christopher Bailey – Giants
Christopher Canole – Felix the Flyer
Colin Costello – Bridezilla vs. Deer
Donna Lisa – Toucans of the Amazon
Duba Leibell – Johnny Girl
Frank Brady – Sweeps
Gregory Orr – The Terror Tapes
James Ossi – Ultraviolet Child
Jason Azicri – Lost Weekend
John Adcox – Challeners
Judith Logan – Dying for Emily
Karl Shefelman – The Chicken Hunters
Kathleen Douglass – Mom Jeans
Kevin Kalmes - Vengeance
Kevin Delin – Heat & Hostility
Michael Farrell – The Operators
Michael Wickham – One For the Road
Mike Anka - Profugo
Murray Spitzer – Fortune Cookie
Paul McComas – Unplugged
Phil Ferriere – Silent Killer
Phillip Yow – Here Today, Gone Tomorrow
Ralph Lucas – The Writers Club
Ronald Brassfield – Eclipse
Susan Klos - Voices
Trish Feehan – Vial Connection
William Dunbar – Iron Bound

Competition winners (1st, 2nd, 3rd and honorable mentions) in both the full-length and teleplay/short categories will be announced on January 1, 2008.

Congratulations and good luck to our finalists. To all contestants who were not selected, do not become disheartened. KEEP WRITING!

Thursday, November 29, 2007

Seven Screenwriting Tricks From Horror Films

by Jason Davis

Spoilers await for those that haven't seen the films, so don't say we didn't warn you!

The Incredible Shrinking Man (1957)
Screenplay by Richard Matheson
Based on his novel The Incredible Shrinking Man

The Lesson: Even the mundane can be extraordinary when attacked from a new angle.

Writer Richard Matheson (Somewhere in Time) often jokes that the word "incredible" isn't really necessary in a title like The Shrinking Man. The redundancy of the adjective speaks to the inherent magic of the premise in which Scott Carey (Grant Williams) passes through a radioactive cloud and begins to shrink. The drama, which centers on Carey's changing relationship with his family on an emotional level and the world itself on a practical level, epitomizes the importance of point of view in storytelling. As his size dwindles, the ordinary becomes bizarre and dangerous as Carey must battle first the family cat and later a house spider. His odyssey does what Matheson and novelist Stephen King excel at -- creating horror amidst the commonplace. Few of us are likely to wander through a cursed burial ground or a haunted house, but each of us face Scott Carey's nemeses on a daily basis. It only takes a shift in perception to make them the stuff of big-screen excitement.

The Haunting(1963)
Screenplay by Nelson Gidding
Based on the novel by Shirley Jackson

The Lesson: Let the viewer do the heavy lifting.

Like so many films, The Incredible Shrinking Man requires its audience to suspend their disbelief. Matheson's screenplay makes it easy by rooting the story in such mundane surroundings, but Nelson Gidding's (The Andromeda Strain) screen treatment of Shirley Jackson's seminal novella, The Haunting of Hill House, takes the movie's reliance on the viewer one step further than most. In the movie, four individuals -- each with their own personal demons -- conduct an investigation into the paranormal phenomena plaguing a notorious haunted mansion. Contrary to the special-effects-laden 1999 remake, the original adaptation of The Haunting places much of the onus on the audience to imagine what causes the disturbing phenomena within the house. Combined with the hysterical behavior of the characters, the viewer's own imagination conjures far more disturbing manifestations of the house's metaphysical malaise than director Robert Wise's $1.1 million dollar budget could ever hope to. The viewers' imaginations are left to fill in the blanks -- as with the minimal use of the shark in Jaws -- creating a far more satisfying experience than could be managed on screen.

Psycho (1960)
Screenplay by Joseph Stefano
Based on the novel by Robert Bloch

The Lesson: Never let the audience take anything for granted.

Like the supernatural menace of The Haunting, the alleged villain of Psycho only makes her post-mortem appearance after it's revealed that her son is responsible for the film's atrocities. Based on the novel by Robert Bloch -- who was himself inspired by the exploits of serial killer Ed Gein -- Psycho chronicles the escape of embezzler Marion Crane (Janet Leigh) to a remote motel, where she's promptly murdered by the psychotic manager, Norman Bates (Anthony Perkins). "So what?" you may ask if you didn't realize that the foregoing all happens in the first act of the film, and that Leigh was billed as the movie's star only to meet her iconic end well before the movie's halfway point. The bold dispatch of the film's supposed star so early in the narrative assured viewers that any character in Joe Stefano's (The Outer Limits) screenplay was fair game and created an atmosphere of tension that eludes most movies where the protagonist is assured a happy ending.

Scream (1996)
Written by Kevin Williamson

The Lesson: Confound the viewer's expectations.

Writer Kevin Williamson (Dawson's Creek) and director Wes Craven (A Nightmare on Elm Street) took a cue from Psycho when crafting the freshman installment of the Scream trilogy for Dimension Films. They off Drew Barrymore in the opening moments of the movie, before properly introducing their audience to the world of Woodsboro, California, a town plagued by a series of serial killings. As the body count rises, protagonist Sidney Prescott (Neve Campbell) and the audience become increasingly confounded as no single suspect among the movie's ensemble cast could possibly have perpetrated all the murders. As Sherlock Holmes remarked in Sir Arthur Conan Doyle's "The Adventure of the Beryl Coronet," "It is an old maxim of mine that when you have excluded the impossible, whatever remains, however improbable, must be the truth." Such is the case with Scream, where it's eventually revealed that two similarly costumed killers are committing the murders in tandem, confounding attempts to unravel the mystery.

The Silence of the Lambs (1991)
Screenplay by Ted Tally
Based on the novel by Thomas Harris

The Lesson: Respect your antagonist.

The villains of Scream prove their ingenuity with their dual-pronged reign of terror, but they are amateurs when compared to the psychotic psychiatrist Hannibal Lecter. Too often, movies set up an unbeatable bad guy who seems invulnerable until the hero needs to defeat them in time for a happy ending. Not so for The Silence of the Lambs. Though serial killer Buffalo Bill (Ted Levine) is brought to justice via Smith and Wesson, a much deadlier antagonist eludes the law in the form of the diabolical Dr. Lecter. Ted Tally's (All the Pretty Horses) screenplay, adapted from the second Lecter novel by Thomas Harris, creates the ultimate villain -- a man so intuitive that he can crawl into FBI Agent Clarice Starling's (Jodie Foster) mind and awaken her greatest childhood fears. Throughout the film, Lecter plays a subtle game of chess with the authorities. He offers Starling insights into Bill while advancing his own campaign to create an opportunity for escape. The viewer may never know what Lecter is thinking at any given moment, but they know he is thinking, and that makes for an effective and charismatic villain.

Don't Look Now(1973)
Screenplay by Alan Scott and Chris Bryant
Based on the story by Daphne Du Maurier

The Lesson: An iconic image is worth pages of dialogue.

The Silence of the Lambs is rife with memorable images -- the moth pulled from the mouth of Bill's victim and Lecter's exquisite face mask to name a few -- but a sure way to imprint ideas into an audience's mind is to marry the notion to an image so potent that it calls back the circumstances of its initial use with every recurrence. Don't Look Now, adapted by Alan Scott (D.A.R.Y.L.) and Chris Bryant (The Awakening) from the short story by Daphne Du Maurier, tells the tale of architectural restorer John Baxter (Donald Sutherland) and his wife, Laura (Julie Christie), who travel to Venice after the death of their daughter (Sharon Williams). The film opens with the little girl drowning in a lake near the family home while wearing a bright red coat. Throughout his time in Venice, John Baxter repeatedly glimpses a small figure in the very same iconic coat, and the nauseating memory of a dying child returns to both the father and the viewer as John tries to unravel the meaning of what has he believes to be a psychic experience. In the end, the figure is revealed to be something quite unexpected, and the revelation carries with it the impact of the death at the top of the film coupled with shock created by a sudden change in the red coat's meaning within the story.

The Exorcist(1973)
Screenplay by William Peter Blatty
Based on his novel

The Lesson: Always play for the biggest stakes.

The loss of a child is a powerful idea that pervades Don't Look Now and provides an anchor to director Nicholas Roeg's (Bad Timing) eccentric narrative, but William Peter Blatty's adaptation of his own novel, The Exorcist, for director William Friedkin (The French Connection) uses the life of a child to even greater effect. In the film, as well as the book, young Regan MacNeil (Linda Blair) is possessed by a demon named Pazuzu, and Father Lancester Merrin (Max Von Sydow) is summoned to save the child's soul from the evil intruder. Blatty's script demonstrates a profound understanding of stakes by balancing the story on both the life of an innocent child and the more metaphysical war between good and evil. Employing the dictate of Psycho, Father Merrin is unequal to the task and meets his maker, leaving the troubled Damien Karras (Jason Miller) to finish the fight against darkness. Like Matheson's work, the story hits us where we live, unfolding in a suburban home as a small girl becomes something terrifying. The supernatural entity likewise fulfills the role of a superlative adversary in a film that defines the horror genre while serving as a benchmark for powerful storytelling.

Jason Davis has been the DVD Manager for CS Weekly, a contributing editor for Creative Screenwriting Magazine, and has written for Cinescape.com, MSN.com, and created the TV series Studio 13, which ran on Lorne Michaels' Burly TV network. He lives in the small space left over by his ever-expanding library of books, movies, and music.

Books That Every Screenwriter Should Read

by Gina Vanname

Written in 1946, this book still holds the foundation of how to write a great story. Egri wrote about playwriting, but everything in this book can be applied to screenwriting. He breaks down the story elements at ground-level so you understand how to build the essentials. A must for your library.


Do you feel that your scripts are plot-heavy and predictable? Ryan's book gives the steps that show you how to write a character-driven screenplay. What comes first--plot or character? This book opens up interesting ideas about developing characters.


James Bonnet has elevated the classical story structure to a new level. He uses the foundation of "myth" structure and creates a contemporary model for writers. After reading this book you understand the secrets behind every great story.

See Script Fly for more screenwriting articles like this.

Wednesday, November 28, 2007

Call for Scripts: Romantic Comedy Wanted

I am a film producer here in Los Angeles and I am looking for a sophisticated romantic comedy script to bundle with various other projects that I will be pitching to a major Hollywood studio next month. Think "When Harry Met Sally", "Sleepless In Seattle" and the like.

This script must be of a professional level. Don't e-mail me about your project if you don't have a finished script longer than 80 pages in length, with proper formatting, spelling, grammar, etc.

Again, I am only looking for romantic comedies at this time. High concept scripts are a plus. Award winning scripts, too.

If you have a finished script that meets the above criteria, feel free to e-mail me with a short pitch and synopsis. DO NOT e-mail me any scripts at this time.

Thank you,

Johnnie J. Young
Young Wolf Productions
P.O. Box 1534
Studio City, CA 91614

jjyoung@mindspring.com

Have Something to Say

"You don't write because you want to say something, you write because you've got something to say."
– F. Scott Fitzgerald

Seven Pillars of Screenwriting Wisdom: From World War I Cinema

by Jason Davis

The War to End All Wars, as it was known before the sequel showed up 20 years later, ended 89 years ago this past Sunday. An armistice terminating hostilities between the Entente Powers and Germany went into effect at the 11th hour of the 11th day of the 11th month. In a tragedy worthy of Sophocles, Canadian Private George Lawrence Price was shot dead by a German sniper at 10:58am. Since that day, the movies have tried to capture the inherent drama of the first modern war -- a spark quickly fanned to conflagration by treaties and alliances, a killing zone characterized by devastating new technologies, and a defining moment in which an entire generation was robbed of its innocence in the trenches of Europe.

In honor of Veteran's Day, CS Weekly looks back at the movies that immortalized the First World War and, to borrow the title of Colonel T.E. Lawrence's memoir of the time, seek some wisdom to enrich our own writing.

Spoilers await for those that haven't seen the films, so don't say we didn't warn you!

Wings (1927)
Screenplay by Hope Loring and Louis D. Lighton
Story by John Monk Saunders
Titles by Julian Johnson

The Lesson: Show the audience something it's never seen.

Stanley Kubrick understood spectacle when he directed 2001: A Space Odyssey, as did George Lucas when he made Star Wars. Show the audience something that they've never seen and they'll line up again and again to re-experience it. Indeed, World War I was all about innovation, and nowhere is this more evident than in the air. We all know of the Red Baron and ace flyer Eddie Rickenbacker because The Great War was the first one waged in the sky, with biplanes angling for the kill at altitude. Wings claimed the first Academy Award for Best Picture (though the award was split between "production" and "artistic" in those days -- Sunset claimed the latter) for its spectacular use of aerial photography to bring the Earthbound audience into the exotic heavens where childhood rivals turned brothers-in-arms Jack Powell (Charles "Buddy" Rogers) and David Armstrong (Richard Arlen) battled the enemy aloft and fought for the affections of the beautiful Sylvia Lewis (Jobyna Ralston) on the ground. Less than a decade after the war, and only 24 years after the Wright brothers first took to the air, the average moviegoer could soar through the sky and experience something that wouldn't become commonplace until half a century later with the advent of affordable air travel.

All Quiet on the Western Front (1930)
Novel by Erich Maria Remarque
Dialogue by Maxwell Anderson and George Abbott
Adaptation by Maxwell Anderson
Screen story by George Abbott

The Lesson: Never forget what the story is about.

Conscripted into the German Army at age 18, Erich Paul Remark witnessed the horrors of trench warfare first hand and, under the pseudonym Erich Maria Remarque , fictionalized his experiences in the classic novel All Quiet on the Western Front. Like the source material, Universal's 1930 film version is suffused with the author's loathing for war. Each scene -- whether it finds protagonist Paul Bäumer (Lewis Ayers) scrambling for sustenance in bombed-out ruins or gazing into the dead eyes of an enemy soldier he's just killed in a blood-soaked trench -- illustrates the physical, emotional, and spiritual toll of the war. Bäumer's journey from an eager schoolboy charged with aspirations of heroism to an embittered pacifist tormented by the hypocrisies of the armchair soldiers in his home town is detailed with bleak honesty. The folks at home can never understand what he's witnessed, but the audience can because we've been along on the journey with him. Claiming the 1930 Oscar for Best Picture (and a nomination for screenwriting), All Quiet on the Western Front revels in its anti-war message and never lets a frame hit the screen without acknowledging the human tragedy that inspired it.

La Grande Illusion (1937)
Screenplay by Jean Renoir and Charles Spaak (the former directed)
Story by Jean Renoir

The Lessson: Bolster a script with subtext that adds depth to the story at hand.

The first foreign film ever nominated for a Best Picture Oscar and decried by Nazi Minister for Public Enlightenment and Propaganda Joseph Goebbels as "Cinematic Public Enemy No. 1," Grand Illusion is ostensibly the tale of two French aviators shot down behind enemy lines. Though Captain de Boeldieu (Pierre Fresnay) and Lieutenant Maréchal's (Jean Gabin) exploits as POWs form the spine of the story, the film is rich with undercurrents that explore the demise of the European class system. After being shot down, de Boeldieu is invited to dinner by their adversary, Captain von Rauffenstein (Erich von Stroheim), who longs for the company of a fellow aristocrat. The film trades in social commentary and points out that, because of their class, de Boeldieu and von Rauffenstein have more in common with one another than with the lower-class men of their own nation. Like All Quiet, Grand Illusion attacks the idea of war as a noble calling and questions the rules established in bygone eras and their validity in a brutal era of mechanized destruction. The film captures the moment when the gentlemanly art of soldiering gave way to mustard gas, trenchfoot, and the manifold horrors of modern war.

Sergeant York (1941)
Screenplay by Abem Finkel & Harry Chandlee and Howard Koch & John Huston
Based on the diary by Alvin C. York and edited by Tom Skeyhill

The Lesson: Contradiction is key to realistic characterization.

Black and white hats are no way to create character. Human beings contain multitudes, and contradiction is at the core of everyone's character. Sergeant Alvin C. York, the most decorated American soldier of the First World War, was no exception to this rule. Compelled by a religious awakening to be a conscientious objector when he was called up, York nevertheless found himself killing 25 German soldiers and capturing a further 132 on October 8, 1918. The action would win him the Medal of Honor and, when America entered World War II, his story became an inspiration for a new generation of American soldiers. York refused to let his story be filmed unless Gary Cooper took on the title roll, and the actor went on to capture York's reluctance and heroism with a subtlety that earned him an Academy Award. The screenwriters, including future Maltese Falconer John Huston, kept the dichotomy of York's character front and center of a script that heartily acknowledged the multi-faceted nature of what makes us human.

Paths of Glory (1957)
Screenplay by Stanley Kubrick and Calder Willingham and Jim Thompson
Based on the novel by Humphrey Cobb

The Lesson: Never take the easy way out of a hard story.

When a suicide mission to take a hill in No Man's Land goes terribly wrong, French General Mireau (George Macready) orders three men from the failed attack to be tried and executed for cowardice in the face of the enemy. As the three men await their judgment, their commanding officer, Colonel Dax (Kirk Douglas), investigates the situation and learns that Mireau opened fire with artillery on his own men during the assault. As the film nears its climax, Dax tries to secure his men's lives by indicting Mireau, but the edicts of so-called military justice are executed and Dax is left to savor a pyrrhic victory when the homicidal Mireau is brought on charges after the fact. Paths of Glory defies the Hollywood tradition of the happy ending, and though we're told Mireau will be punished for his misdeeds, the fact that three innocent soldiers still pay the price for his twisted policies gives the movie its moral power to denigrate the injustices perpetrated in the tale.

Lawrence of Arabia (1962)
Screenplay by Robert Bolt and Michael Wilson
Based on the writings of T.E. Lawrence

The Lesson: Revel in the weaknesses of your protagonist.

When the British Army assigned Lieutenant T. E. Lawrence to unite the warring Arab tribes against the Ottoman Empire, a legend was born and the makings of an Academy Award-nominated script (the film would win the Best Picture Oscar) were at hand. Opening with Lawrence's (Peter O'Toole) death and funeral before slipping back to his exploits in World War I, the film is quick to offer opposing views of its title character, with one funeral attendee who never knew the man admonishing an associate of the deceased for an unkind remark. Lawrence's meteoric rise from a humble admirer of the Arab people to a historical legend single-handedly winning the war in the Middle East is played out with equal deference to his open-mindedness as well as his arrogance. Though the former drives the story, the latter provides the most memorable material, as when Lawrence undertakes to enter an enemy village as an Arab and is detained and tortured by the Turks for his ill-conceived hubris. The nearly four-hour epic puts its hero under the microscope and never forgets the character's interior world as it depicts his exterior exploits. The Lawrence who finishes the film bears only a scant resemblance to the man with whom the viewer set off across the desert, but the viewer is privy to every scar he incurs on his journey.

Gallipoli (1981)
Screenplay by David Williamson
Story by Peter Weir (also directed)

The Lesson: A strong recurring motif can get a weighty story up on its feet.

Gallipoli chronicles the exploits of two young Australians doomed to perish in the disastrous Battle of Gallipoli on August 17, 1915. Archie Hamilton (Mark Lee) and Frank Dunne (Mel Gibson) bond over their mutual love for running in their native Australia. Encouraged by their new country's desire to make a name for itself in battle, Hamilton and Dunne enlist and find their way from the Anzac (Australian and New Zealand Army Corps) training grounds in Cairo to the eponymous beachfront battle in Turkey. Along the way, the motif of running is consistently deployed to define both characters. Indeed, Hamilton's final run becomes the lynchpin of the movie's climax as he desperately tries to relay orders in the chaos of the battle.

Nearly 90 years on, it's clear that the War to End All Wars was anything but the final word on human aggression, but as America pays respect to veterans of all her wars, CS Weekly hopes we can learn something from bygone tragedies that allows the storytellers of tomorrow the opportunity to inspire their audiences toward a better future.

Jason Davis has been the DVD Manager for CS Weekly, a contributing editor for Creative Screenwriting Magazine, and has written for Cinescape.com, MSN.com, and created the TV series Studio 13, which ran on Lorne Michaels' Burly TV network. He lives in the small space left over by his ever-expanding library of books, movies, and music.

Quotes

"Somehow, people think animation is different. It's funny because we don't have separate theaters for animation films. People pay the same ticket price, they buy the same popcorn. The creation of the story is the same -- it's the same entertaining experience. I don't know. People just see it differently."
– Pixar's John Lasseter on animated films having their own Oscar category

"Film is the most wonderful medium invented. It's recorded dreaming. And I think people need to recognize that the language of film -- using angles and shots and color and music and performance -- is essentially the same from medium to medium. I'm not one of those people who believe that CG is superior to every other form of animation. It's not. It's simply another tool that you can use to express yourself."
– Ratatouille's Brad Bird

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Gangsters, Writers, and Wood-Chippers

by Danny Munso

The early output of the Coen Brothers sees release in a collection heavy on great writing and brilliant filmmaking, but woefully short on supplemental features.

No Country for Old Men

The Coen Brothers' latest film, No Country for Old Men, has just hit theaters, making this box set of five of their first six films (only 1994's underrated The Hudsucker Proxy is missing) especially timely. Though the filmmakers have certainly had their fair share of misfires, none of them are included here, making this set essential viewing for any lover of film.

Blood Simple

Blood Simple (1984) announced their arrival with a gunshot -- actually, several gunshots -- in a grisly, harrowing noir piece that seems intent on shocking the audience, rather than impressing them. The story follows a bar owner's (Dan Hedaya) hiring of a P.I. (M. Emmett Walsh) to kill his cheating wife (Frances McDormand) and her lover (John Getz). Even in their first work, the Coens' unique writing style is firmly in place, as it toggles between shocking violence and a dry sense of humor. Of all their films, this is by far the most violent, and though it is a tad stylized, it links in with the dark story they are portraying. A rich thriller, Blood Simple is still among their strongest films, even 20 years on.

Raising Arizona

The same cannot be said, surprisingly, for Raising Arizona. Often cited as one of their best, Raising Arizona is a comedy about ex-con Hi (Nicolas Cage) and his police officer wife, Ed (Holly Hunter), stealing a baby because they cannot conceive one on their own. A complete 180 from Blood Simple, Arizona shows the Coens' love for genre films, and while the former was their nod to noir, this one is their version of the slapstick comedy. And it is definitely funny -- as best seen when Ed falls in love with Hi while taking his mug-shots -- but the film has not aged well, and some of the jokes seem a little tasteless. The physical comedy is enough to save it, but I guess kidnapping isn't as funny a subject as I thought it was the first time I saw the film.

Miller's Crossing

Miller's Crossing is the weakest film of this bunch, and while there is much to like about it, it is almost a little (dare I say it) clichéd for a Coen Brothers film. The story is about a mob boss (Albert Finney) and his lieutenant (Gabriel Byrne) who fall for the same woman (Marcia Gay Harden) as a turf-war with a rival breaks out. To their credit, the Coens nail the period dialogue and make you wonder what kind of films they could have made with Humphrey Bogart had they been born earlier or him later. However, for a story with so many plot threads, it's way too predictable, and the film, despite its merits, falls a little flat.

Barton Fink

A story about a screenwriter? This must be good. Written during a period of writer's block on Miller's Crossing, Barton Fink follows the creatively challenged title character (John Turturro) who abandons his noble aspirations and sells out to Hollywood by penning a wrestling movie. Any writer can empathize with Fink as he sinks deeper into despair and must decide whether to stick to his guns or give in to the human desire to be accepted. The film is bitingly funny, favoring satire over slapstick to skewer the Hollywood system that the Coens were living on the fringes of at the time. As a comedy, Barton Fink is pretty great, but as a manifestation of the true insecurities and pleasures of being a writer, it's even better.

Fargo

The set's crown jewel is Fargo, the brilliant film that brought the Coens into the mainstream, won two Oscars (including Best Original Screenplay), and features their most iconic character: Marge Gunderson (Frances McDormand), the pregnant sheriff of Brainerd, Minnesota. She investigates a kidnapping gone wrong at the hands of its bumbling mastermind (William H. Macy) and clueless thugs (Steve Buscemi, Peter Stormare). Marge is unique to this set as she is the only lead character that we have no trouble sympathizing with. Though the Coens love to put highly flawed people at the center of their stories, we're with Marge the whole way. Fargo is still the quintessential Coen film, with its big laughs and even bigger puddles of blood. Most of the deaths (a wood chipper, anyone?) are both funny and cruel, but the laughs never undercut the script's tension. With apologies to the fun O Brother, Where Art Thou?, Fargo represents the last great film by the Coens and contains a magic they only recently rediscovered.

The collection contains some of the great work by two of the truly unique and masterful filmmakers to ever pick up a pen and camera, but if insight into their process is what you're after, plan on looking elsewhere. But if it's five great films you want in one package, this collection is hard to pass up.



Danny Munso graduated from film school in 2004 and can currently be found on his computer working on one of his many half-written screenplays. Or, more likely, he's on the Internet checking the scores of his beloved Bay Area sports teams.

Give The Gift Of Screenwriting School In A Box

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These 50 DVDs are the live teaching sessions of successful screenwriters and many of the world's top screenwriting teachers, captured in live 90-minute presentations revealing the keys to screenwriting success and answer questions from aspiring screenwriters. Lectures, questions and answers, examples from great films and TV shows

There is no other screenwriting course of study anywhere in the world like this -- except paying the tuition and spending the years getting a master's degree and beyond in film school. And in one way, this set vastly beats film school: study at your leisure, no notes to take, no exams or dull required writing exercises, and they are always there as references.

In fact, these DVDs go far beyond a film school education. These working writers -- and teachers whose students have collectively thousands of credits for produced work -- go deep into the writing skills, tricks of the trade, trade secrets, and most important, door-opening skills and steps your screenwriter will need to succeed in this tough but rewarding business.

The full set includes all of the following subsets of DVDs, and more:

Screenwriting For Beginners: It's not only for the writer just starting out. Any experienced screenwriter can benefit from this thorough re-immersion in the basics. In fact, if you're writing but not selling, it may very well be something basic you're not doing or doing wrong;

Writing the Masterpiece: a 5-DVD course on taking your screenwriting to the next level;

The Pitchpack: 5 DVDs revealing how to successfully pitch your story;

The Stylepack: developing your own distinctive style;

Karl Iglesias' Writing For Emotional Impact: the full set of courses from one of the most popular screenwriting teachers in the U.S.

Wordplay: Secrets of the Screenwriting Trade: William Goldman, Paul Haggis, David Koepp, Susannah Grant --a 10-hour set of working screenwriters telling how.

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There is a reason it's the most widely read and most praised magazine on screenwriting in the world: it's the best.

Creative Screenwriting Magazine contains more interviews with produced Hollywood and independent screenwriters than any other magazine.

The Strike: Time To Prepare to For That Next Big Opportunity

It's an ugly fact: the dispute between the Writers Guild and the studios will leave the studios running leaner, meaner, and hungrier for new work. The last major strike spawned the greatest spec script market in the history of the business. A strike will open up opportunities to land a new TV writing job, or even create an entirely new show. But you must be ready for when the strike ends.

Here's how the screenwriter in your life can prepare: get the November-December issue of Creative Screenwriting Magazine (subscribe or get it on newsstands this week) and read the article on how to start preparing NOW for the spring TV pitching season (it may be later--but writers need to start watching shows now to be ready).

Give the screenwriter in your life (Is that you? It's OK to buy for yourself!) the best possible chance of making it in this tough but rewarding business: DVDs on the business and craft of screenwriting and a subscription to Creative Screenwriting Magazine.

2008 Call For Films - Urban Film Series

http://www.urbanfilmseries.com

Film Submission Deadlines

5th Annual Black History Month Film & Discussion Series ~ January 1st
Black Docs Film Series ~ February 25th
Urban Film and Discussion Series ~ April 1st
Urban Film Series Tour ~ March 1st; June 1st
Children's Film and Education Festival ~ June 1st
Health and Wellness Film Festival ~ September 1st
Exclusive Screenings and Marketing Assistance ~ Year-Round

Packaging

Submit press packets with submissions or provide a 1-page detailed description of your submission with vitae. Include a self-addressed and stamped return package (if return required). Films still in our receipt are still under consideration for programming.

Media

Film and video entries must be on DVD (if available) ~ DVD Copies Must Be Available for Screenings, unless otherwise agreed. For 2008, shorts, features, documentaries, videos, and children's films are encouraged.

Fees

Please include a money order or cashier's check for the $20 processing fee with your entry; $35 if submitting for multiple programs; an additional $10 late fee will apply for packages postmarked after respective deadlines. Make all checks out to "Next Generation Awareness Foundation."

Send submissions to:

Project Coordinator
{Name of the Series -or- "2008 Programs" if Submitting for All Programs}
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Anatomy of a Logline

by Rob Gregory-Browne

You've written your script. You've labored over it for weeks and months and polished every syllable until your masterpiece is ready to hit the marketplace. Now comes the most frequently asked question I get: Who do I send my script to?

My response is usually another question: are you sure you're ready to send it?

So many of us want to send out our scripts the moment they're finished, yet we don't even think about what it takes just to find someone to send it to. "Find" is actually the wrong word. You'll never be able to "find" anyone in this business who actually wants to read a script.

What you have to do is attract readers. And to attract readers you have to call on all your skills as a salesman.

SELLING YOUR WARES

Salesman? you cry. But I'm a writer not a salesman! Uh-huh. Glad you've enjoyed your stint in fantasyland, my friend, but it's time to take a step into the real world. In fact, I could argue that you should be thinking like a salesman with every single word you put down on paper, but that isn't what this article is about.

At this point, you have a product that needs to be moved and there's only one way to move it: Advertising. Any good salesman knows all about the benefits of advertising. From the biggest corporation with their multi-million dollar commercials to the guy standing on the street holding a sign for the local car dealer: Big Savings! Today Only!

Advertising is what any good salesman uses to attract buyers. You go to a used car dealer to see what's available and what happens? The salesman comes over and guides you toward the latest lemon while he tries to smooth-talk you into buying it. And, boy does he make it attractive. It has the latest this and the latest that and it's only been driven by a little old lady on weekends, and once you get it on the road, this baby purrs. His sales pitch is his advertisement.

And that's exactly how you get people to read your screenplay. Your sales pitch. You have to prepare your pitch both verbally and on paper and you have to present it with confidence and polish. Otherwise nobody will take you seriously, and nobody will want to read your script.

THE ALL-IMPORTANT SALES PITCH

You've all probably heard of a Svengali Deck, otherwise known as TV Magic Cards. For those of you who haven't, a Svengali Deck is a special deck of playing cards that allows the user to perform a dozen or more amazing card tricks without having to develop any sleight of hand skills.

In the old days, magician/pitch-men used to stand on street corners or at swap meet booths and demonstrate the wonders of this deck of cards by showing you an eye-popping trick. This trick would be brief and straight to the point -- just enough to show off the virtues of the deck and get you digging for the cash to buy one.

When you prepare your all-important sales pitch to entice readers to your script, you have to approach your pitch with the same economy and magic the magician/pitch-men use. You have to get your story across in a few simple words and those words must have eye-popping appeal. They must have that wow quality that forces the reader to say, "I've gotta read that script..." That's where your logline comes in.

WHAT'S A LOGLINE?

There are always a few out there who are relatively new to the game, so this is for you: a logline is a one or two-sentence summary of your story. Probably the best place to find a sample logline is to look in your TV Guide or local equivalent, which are full of brief story summaries. But let me give you an example.

Here's a logline for The Fugitive:

After he's wrongly convicted of murdering his wife, a high-powered surgeon escapes custody and hunts down the real killer, a one-armed man.

Maybe not the liveliest logline in the world, but it tells you just about everything you need to know about the movie. We know who the lead character is, what his dilemma is and, most importantly, what he hopes to accomplish.

What we have above is essentially the spine of the story -- the sentence the entire movie hangs on. Sure, we could talk about the relentless U.S. Marshal who is after the doctor; we could talk about the train crash and the chase sequences and the experimental liver drug, but when it comes to the logline, none of that really matters. We don't have time for it.

Like that TV Magic card trick, your logline has to be simple and to the point and it has to attract the reader to the possibility of a great read. When I look at the above logline, I think, "Wow, that sounds like it could be an exciting story." And, of course, we all know it is.

The anatomy of a logline is this: The lead character has a problem and must achieve a certain goal in order to solve that problem. Who, What, How. Who is the lead character, what is his problem and how is going to solve it.

Let's take a look at The Fugitive again:

Who: A high-powered surgeon.

What: Wrongly convicted of murdering his wife.

How: He escapes custody to hunt down the real killer.

Chances are pretty good that you're scratching your head right now and saying, "But my story is much too complex for that." This may be true, but if you can't boil your story down to a simple Who, What and How, I've got some sad news for you: you are in serious trouble.

Because if you can't boil your story down, no one else is going to be interested in trying to figure it out. So what's a poor screenwriter to do? Try this on for size:

CREATE YOUR LOGLINE BEFORE THE FACT

That's right. The most important step you can take toward structuring a script is to create your logline or spine before you start writing the script. You have your idea, you have your characters, you have a general idea of what you want to happen and how you want it to happen, but what do you hang it on? Without a spine, your creation will be nothing more than a mess of flesh and bones. There may be a lot of interesting stuff there, but it has nothing to cling to.

So before you start page one, scene one, the best thing you can do for your story is figure out the Who, What and How. Write them down. Fashion them into something that has movement and purpose. Then start writing. And as you write, always remember your spine. And stick to it.

Then, when the script is done and it comes time to work up a sales pitch, you don't have to search. You already know what it is. Your entire story is based on that sales pitch. As it should be.

I can hear you now. "Come on, man, I already told you. My story is too complex for that." Is it really? Let's take a look at a very complex story: The Godfather. We all know The Godfather is full of vivid characters and great subplots and big moments, but what really is the essence of the story?

Here's what I get:

When a powerful gangster is gunned down, his reluctant son must seek revenge and take over the family business.

The movie plays on a rich canvas, but it is much less about Brando, the Godfather, and more about Pacino -- Michael Corleone -- the up and coming Godfather. It is the story of his ascent (or descent, depending on your POV) to the leadership of the Family. Everything in the movie leads up to the moment Vito Corleone is shot, then follows Michael as he gets revenge, then eventually takes over as head of the organization. Everything in the movie hangs on that simple logline or spine.

Do you think Coppola discovered this spine only after he and Puzo wrote the screenplay? I seriously doubt it.

LOGLINE AS SALES PITCH

Let's get back to our original notion of what a logline is for. As I said, if you know your logline before your start, then you shouldn't have a problem figuring out what it is after your script is done. But you're trying to sell something here. If you follow the usual marketing strategies, you'll be sending out query letters and making phone calls and throwing your pitch at just about anyone who is willing to catch it. And in order to get their attention; the logline you pitch had better shine. It shouldn't simply tell the story. There should be something in that brief one or two-sentence pitch that really makes it stand out.

Unfortunately, that's difficult to do if the elements aren't there. In this day and age, it isn't enough to have a great story. These days, with all the competition out there, you have to have a great story with an even greater hook. You have to have what is commonly referred to as high concept -- an idea that jumps off the page.

A cop must find out a way to save a busload of people stranded on a bus that will explode if it drops below 55 MPH.

A young wife discovers that the husband she's been convicted of killing is not really dead, and escapes custody to track him down.

These are high concept ideas that immediately grab you. You can go back to The Godfather pitch and even that has a pretty high concept idea. And unless you start with a high concept idea, you're going to have a really tough time making your logline shine.

And if your idea isn't high concept? What do you do?

First, you wonder if your script really is ready to be read. If you think it is, you have to find the hook hidden inside of it, find that simple spine that tells us what the story's about...

And turn it into gold.

© 1999-2000, 2002 Robert Gregory-Browne

11 Non-Writing Things You Could Do to Improve Your Screenwriting

by Gina Vanname

The best way to improve your screenwriting is to write, but sometimes you just need a break. Here are 11 tools that you could use to enrich your writing when you're not writing.

TOOL #1 - GO TO THE MOVIES

Not just to watch a movie, but also to analyze it. See a movie that is similar to the idea you're working on. Bring a watch and time the act breaks.

Observe where the act breaks occur (i.e. first act break at 25 minutes into the movie, second act break happens at 58 minutes, etc.) After the movie ends, think about how effective the act breaks were, the overall feel of the movie, and it's pacing.

Did the movie feel slow to start? If so, did the first act break happen too late? How did you feel at the end? Satisfied? Curious? Disappointed? What worked and what didn't? At what point were you engaged? Did you forget about timing it? If so, what was happening when you forgot and when you remembered once again? How would you describe this movie -- by the plot or by the main character's journey?

Were the characters interesting and developed enough for you to guess how their life would continue after the movie ended? Was the feeling you had after the movie ended still with you by the time you got home?

Successful movies are able to stick with you for a while. Analyzing these things will improve your own writing.

TOOL #2 - WATCH A DVD

Not just any DVD. The DVD must have an audio commentary. There are a lot of DVDs now released or re-released with Director / Writer commentaries. This is a special tool that is invaluable to any filmmaker or writer.

Believe me, you will learn an abundance of information that will help you write. If the writer is the director all the better.

Watch the movie first so that you understand what they're talking about. Some DVD commentaries I recommend are: American Beauty, Pi, Boogie Nights, Usual Suspects, The Matrix, Unbound, and Contact.

TOOL #3 - READ A SCREENPLAY

This is perhaps one of the best tools for new and experienced writers. If you're going to be a screenwriter you must read other writers' work.
There is just no way around it.

When you read a screenplay of a movie you have seen you get all sorts of useful information to use for your own writing. Study how the writer wrote the action on the page.

Does he write anything internal (not visual) and if so, what and why? How much did he describe in the scene or about the location? What is his style? If you can, read both the writer's final draft (the draft that the
studio bought) and the studio's final draft (final shooting script) to compare the changes.

TOOL #4 - EAVESDROP

(Warning: Do this at your own risk. There's a chance that you could get yourself into trouble). A local coffee shop will do or some place where
people sit and talk. Usually, two people sitting together have better conversations than if more than two. If they talk loud enough, I'm under the impression that they "want" others to listen. So listen.

Bring a notepad with you and do this alone. Jot down whatever you hear. Take notice of their speech patterns, what they say between the lines, and how their friend reacts. Examine their relationship... who dominates
their conversation... what is the motivation of the speaker... do they cut each off... are they talking about the same thing... or different things between the lines?

You can gather a lot of information about personalities and relationships, more than people know about themselves. This tool helps enhance your characterizations, especially your dialogue and subtext. Just remember that people's speech is mostly banter, whereas movie dialogue is a
prudent version of real conversation.

TOOL #5 - WATCH TV WITH SUBTITLES

If you don't have a TV that has a subtitle option, some DVD have subtitles. This tool helps with your dialogue. Watch the entire movie with the subtitles turned on. It helps to read the words the characters' are speaking, so you get to see how an actor executes this dialogue and how it would be written on the page.

TOOL #6 - GO TO A SPEAKER ENGAGEMENT

If you live in Los Angeles there are tons of places to hear screenwriters speak about screenwriting. If you don't live in Los Angeles, check with a large bookstore like Barnes & Noble or Borders to get a schedule of their speakers, readings, etc. Even hearing a novelist talk about his or her writing process is helpful to screenwriters.

TOOL #7 - PEOPLE WATCH

I used to do this with mirrored or dark glasses so nobody was aware. If they became aware... the game was over, because their actions became self-conscious or motivated.

This exercise helps writers with characterization. Studying people is a great tool for writers. One time, I saw a woman with a stroller. She was talking to and fussy over the baby inside. She left the train and I got a glimpse of the baby... it was a plastic doll. Jeez, there's a story in that!

How would you succinctly describe a person's physical characteristics? How would you describe their actions? Also, take note about their dress... are they wearing things that flashes a hint at their personality? A pink hat, green-horned glasses, or a religious icon.

Ask yourself, "How would this person react to a death, a winning lottery ticket, a solicitation, a threat, to making love? You can invent entire histories for strangers.

TOOL #8 - GO TO SEMINARS

Check with colleges and schools in your area for weekend or one-day screenwriting seminars. Listening to what others have to say about screenwriting techniques always brings new perspectives.

TOOL #9 - READ A BOOK

Pick a classic or contemporary fiction. While reading, take note of how the author describes the characters. What words and adjectives do they use? How does he or she write characters' actions? What verbs do they use?

Does the author successfully describe the scene or location in one sentence? How do they construct their sentences?

Keep in mind the main differences between a novel and a screenplay; novels could use internalization, whereas, descriptions in a screenplay should be visual and should never state a character's thoughts; and the novel's dialogue is usually weak, but in a screenplay it needs to be crisp and definitive.

TOOL #10 - VISUALIZATION

This is a form of meditation that can help writers. Get yourself comfortable, either lying down or sitting, breath deeply for a while, relax, and clear your head.

This only works if you quiet your mind. Gently push away any thoughts that come into your head. Once clear, begin to visualize yourself in the place where you usually write (your desk computer, your laptop). And visualize yourself typing fast without any breaks in keypunching. Visual yourself finishing a screenplay. Visualize the finished screenplay with your name on it.

Keep visualizing this every day. This exercise works if you do it diligently. Soon, you'll visualization will be manifested and you'll have finished your draft. This exercise is good for any stage of writing; visualize yourself selling it to a producer, getting an agent, getting the big check, getting it made, and getting an award.

TOOL #11 - READ A SCREENWRITING BOOK

Reading one screenwriting book will help you with at least one new writing technique. Even if you've read it before, you will pick up something new or remember some method that you could use.

FINAL THOUGHTS
Whether you're between scripts, experiencing writer's block, or just want to kill time, using any one of these tools repeatedly will definitely improve your screenwriting.

Other benefits of these tools are they inspire, generate new ideas, and even eliminate any guilty feelings you may experience when you're not actually writing.

DON'T GIVE UP!!!

©ScriptFLY 2001-2004

BASIC Attraction: How Movie Titles Work (or don't)

by Gabrielle S. Prendergast

The other day I read in the paper how the group formerly known as: "The Nursing Mother's Association of Australia" had proudly unveiled their new name: "The Australian Breast Feeding Association". Apparently, in the 1950's when the Association was formed, the Post-Master General (What's HE got to do with it one wonders.) would not allow the word "breast" to appear in the telephone book. Now that we are more open minded about such things the former NMAA felt it worthy of the expense of replacing all their stationery and issuing a media release to finally adopt what they no doubt felt was their rightful name from the start, including this time, that previously offending word.

Names: the names of groups, organisations and products are monumentally important. Millions of dollars are spent developing them, testing them and refining them. There are no doubt university courses and professional seminars dedicated to the creation of names. Some of us as film-makers and writers know the agony of trying to come up with the right name, the right film title, or worse, discovering the perfect one only to learn that it's already taken.

So just how important are names of films? Will Shakespeare tells us that a "rose by any other name would smell as sweet", but does it follow that Rick's Place would have become the classic that Casablanca did? Or that Not Tonight Josephine would have made us laugh as much as Some Like it Hot, or The Greatest Gift made us cry as much as It's a Wonderful Life? Would Pansey have become a blockbuster like Gone with the Wind?

For some screenwriters the title is the first thing they think of and a major source of their inspiration. In fact the title may be the ONLY thing they know about their project, before they even know what it's about. I myself have worked this way. For others the title of their current piece might be Teen Comedy or Vampire Thriller until some production or publication executive comes up with American Pie or From Dusk Til Dawn. However a project is named, there is universal agreement that the title of a film or a book or even a TV show plays a critical role in its success.

Many film projects start out with working titles. The website "The Stinkers" (http://www.thestinkers.com/working.html) lists some famous and not so famous examples. When I was reading this list I asked myself two questions: ' Where do titles come from?' and What makes a good title?'

For example where did the title Pretty Woman come from, given that the working title was $3000? My suspicion is that it came from the Roy Orbison song, which ended up figuring prominently in the movie. There are a few examples of this "song titling" in films. Callie Khouri, the writer of Thelma & Louise expressed her disappointment that her second film, which she called Grace Under Pressure ended up being named after the song , Something to Talk About. Personally I think Something to Talk About is a better title, but I'll get to that. Can't Buy Me Love is another example, and in which the movie failed miserably to live up to the quality of the song for which it was named.

Two word titles seem to be particularly popular and this has led to the interesting phenomenon, which I call 'Meaningless two-word titles' or MTWTs. I'm not sure where this trend started, but Fatal Attraction and Basic Instinct fixed MTWTs firmly in the realm of psychological thriller, although occasionally you get an action movie like Executive Decision or Absolute Aggression. What I like about these titles is how interchangeable they are. One can readily imagine a movie called Executive Instinct, for example, perhaps about a CEO who believes he's being stalked by a crazed lesbian killer. BASIC Attraction is more likely to be a romantic comedy about a couple of computer programmers. Absolute Decision sounds like a vodka ad while Fatal Aggression could work as a courtroom drama, as in "he attacked her with Fatal Aggression" etc., etc.

Apparently, production executives (a MTWT in itself) are rather enamoured of MTWTs and spend afternoons, no doubt boozily, dreaming them up. I'm tempted to design a computer program, which will automatically generate possible MTWTs for them based on the parameters they set. A film dealing with, say, the parameters: fear, aggression, desire, and subversion could be called Aggressive Fear (bland),Fearful Desire" (suggestive but clunky), Subversive Desire (not bad), Aggressive Desire (?!), Subversive Aggression (illogical)…you get the picture. I'm told there's software for pharmaceutical companies, which does just this, from whence we got the name of, amongst other things, Bufferin.

The popularity of MTWTs carries over into another popular form of film title and that's the "Full Name" phenomenon. Jerry Maguire, Barry Lyndon, and Simon Birch are all examples, not to mention the classic, Annie Hall. I like to think of the production exec who first heard about a sexy single mother, foul mouthed legal clerk who won a multi-million dollar case and then had the icing on top of discovering her name was the catchy: Erin Brockovich - it was solid gold before it was even written.

Name titles have a satisfying feel to them, whether they're just the name, or something a little extra like Bridget Jones's Diary or Robin Hood: Prince of Thieves or the extremely clever Being John Malkovich. At least they help the less sophisticated movie-goer (or script reader) know for whom the film is actually about, and given Saving Private Ryan, that's no mean feat.

There are other types of titles: place titles like Notting Hill or Jurassic Park; catchphrase titles like Say It Isn't So and just plain situation titles like Election. One of my favourite types of title is what I call the "brilliant title", which is a title so hot that just mentioning it causes frothing at the mouth, profuse sweating and a frenzy of faxing between production companies, agents and managers. Recently, the legend went round that the very title, murder.com, was bought for six figures, with no script, treatment or story attached at all. Given that titles aren't copyright material, I find this hard to believe but what the heck, it's a good yarn, especially since the tech stock crash has probably severely cooled the enthusiasm for this little gem.

A few years ago I knew of about a dozen writers and execs busily fighting the clock to green light projects called Y2K. One or two made it into production but neither of them were very memorable; kind of like the event they were named after. So beware of the "brilliant title"; it gets old rather quickly. Anyway, what you think is a brilliant title is just as likely to be considered banal or ridiculous by everyone else. I once met a kid in an internet chat room who proudly told me he had titled his forthcoming teen angst epic with the mind-numbingly hackneyed MTWT, Shattered Innocence. It was all I could do to conceal my hilarity as I offered some non-committal encouragement and hastily logged off to snigger in private.

But back to that list of working titles. Now that we know what kind of titles there are and presumably where they come from, let's look at the question: what makes a good title?

According to the list at The Stinkers.com, the original title of the aforementioned Annie Hall was Anhedonia. I've got to side with the committee on this one. To me, Anhedonia is just baffling, while Annie Hall, history has shown us, introduced us not only to an Academy Award winning character but also to menswear dressing, a style that still pops up in fashion magazines every now and then. Because the movie was about Annie, even though Woody Allen was the protagonist, the title created distance between them, between the subject and the object, if you will.

Another example is As Good as it Gets, the original title of which was Old Friends. The working title says nothing; it could be about a couple of dogs, whereas the release title implies tension, because we're not sure whether it means "So good it couldn't be better" or "As good as can be expected" and only when we see the film do we discover it's somewhere in the middle. As Good as it Gets also implies some distance between the original state of crumminess as measured against the current state, which is: "As Good as…".

Not all titles create tension, but if a title doesn't work that may be something to look at. Consider the working title: Harry, this is Sally. This title is complete, it's all there is. Harry is introduced to Sally and that's the end of the story, whereas the release title When Harry Met Sally has an implied "…", and a question remains that can only be answered by seeing the movie or reading the script.

One of the worst things a writer can do is to give up the whole story in the title. The Englishman Who Went Up a Hill and Came Down a Mountain is an example of this. Once you've seen the title you know what happens so why see the movie, or read the script? This is why Ace Ventura: When Nature Calls is better than its working title Ace Ventura Goes to Africa. I'm not one of those who believe a short title is best. Midnight in the Garden of Good and Evil has to be one of the all time best titles in my opinion. It's just so darn stylish, although, having said that, I have neither read the book nor seen the movie so maybe it's not so great after all. Maybe the title is too satisfying, so much that I don't NEED to see the movie. I guess that's another mistake.

So a good title leaves something unanswered. Even the 'full-name" titles make us ask ourselves, 'Who is this Erin Brockovich anyway?' Many people have expressed interest in my soon to be a feature film script Hildegarde for this very reason; they just want to know who Hildegarde is.

And then there's the ultimate crime: some titles don't say anything at all. Elizabeth English, Founder & Executive Director of the Moondance International Film Festival writes of receiving amongst a thousand other entries to the script competition at the festival, a screenplay entitled The Tent. She couldn't be bothered reading it and kept putting it to the bottom of her pile. When she finally did read it she discovered what was to be one of the semi-finalists that year. Imagine if you wrote a winning script only to have it languish in the reject piles of producers from Bel Air to Brooklyn because the title didn't do it justice.

Not long ago I had a student write a "parallel universe" script (a la Sliding Doors or The Family Man) and he called it, you guessed it, Parallel Universe. I had to hit the buzzer on that one. That's kind of like calling a movie Romantic Comedy or Buddy Road Movie. A title needs to say something and it needs to be unique. Recently, a movie came out called The Quest. I giggled all the way into a cinema that was showing something with a better title.

And why do I prefer Something to Talk About to Grace Under Pressure? Mostly because Grace Under Pressure is a cliché and because it's about a character called Grace that makes it a pun. And there's nothing worse than clichés and puns; they're like a crap on a hot tin roof: smelly!

Which brings us to you, the screenwriter, and how titles can help you. It's obvious how a title can help you market your script but what's not so clear is how a title can help you write it. I always encourage my students to come up with a title early in the piece, even before characters and plot sometimes. I try to name all my projects very early on for the most basic reason that they're easier to talk about, think about and write notes about. If I write myself a note reading "put a dead dog into the sci-fi teen comedy thing" I might not have any idea what it means in two or three beers, I mean, days, but if the note reads: "Prom Queens from Space needs a dead dog" then this little inspiration will not be lost. This also helps in discipline. You can schedule time for Prom Queens in Space and time for BASIC Attraction and clearly know what you're working on and when by the neat little chart you draw on your office white board. In less mundane terms, titles can help you to crystallize what your script is about. One of the few times I wrote a script without first having a title when I got to the end left me at quite a loss. I ended up using an almost "Zen" method where I meditated on my story until seemingly from space the title Breathe emerged. Before I knew it, my script was imbued with all manner of breathing, swimming, drowning, and air metaphors, improving it immeasurably. It went on to win awards so I must have done something right.

Titles can also serve as inspiration from the start. One of the suggestions I make to my students, when they are struggling to find inspiration, is to go to the fantasy section of their local bookstore and steal titles. It's amazing the images that a title like The Obsidian Oracle or Crown of Swords can conjure up, especially if one determines to NOT write a fantasy story. The Obsidian Oracle for example, sounds like a political thriller to me, I'm not sure why, while Crown of Swords sounds like some kind of choking plant that only grew on the shores of the Mississippi during the depression when your character was the child of poor white share croppers.

Title wordplay can be a rich source of inspiration, like the MTWTs game I played earlier. BASIC Attraction I feel would have been a great title if it had arrived in the time when BASIC computer language was de rigueur. Unfortunately, that was years ago; it's an idea after its time. Clichés and puns, contrary to the above, CAN be inspiring, but I would tend then to name the project something else, just to not annoy people like me. There's a film out at the moment called Along Came a Spider. It's a cute title I suppose, but it irritates me. I know it's not about Little Miss Muffett, but I still can't take it seriously. Then again I think the title Legally Blonde is brilliant.

No matter how you look at it, titles are critical and not to be treated lightly. They're a source of inspiration, a focussing tool for revision, a marketing tool and even a subtle hint for unsophisticated audiences. Respect the title, make it your friend, your ally, your partner in crime. Never underestimate its power to make your project sink or swim.

Finally, spare a thought for the writer who dreams up the perfect title and sells it to the production executive only to have it massacred by foreign translators. Some brilliant examples: As Good as it Gets in Hong Kong? Mister Cat Poop. Annie Hall in Germany? The Urban Neurotic. Sometimes, however, these translations might turn out to be improvements. Which movie title sounds more interesting to you: the MTWT Deep Impact or the "whole story in the title" translation from Taiwan A Planet Will Hit the Earth? It's clear, it's unique, it certainly implies tension, and it's kind of catchy in its own little way. What a pity the movie was so bad.

Gabrielle Prendergast is the screenwriter of the 2002 feature film HILDEGARDE starring Richard E Grant. She has optioned a number of other screenplays in Australia and the USA. A short film-maker and published novelist, Gabrielle has taught at the University of Sydney and TropNest, Fox Studios Screenplay Development Center. She is currently doing an MFA at the University of British Columbia in Vancouver, Canada, where she lives with her husband and daughter. You can email her at: gprendergast@scriptfly.com

Motivate Audiences With Motivation

by Ian Coburn

"The box-office is in a slump." This statement has plagued the film industry the last few years. Why?

It’s an age-old question: What makes a movie a domestic box-office draw? Given the subjectivity of the medium, start with me. Is it my opinion that makes a film a draw? Nope, not a fan of Titanic. What about film critics? Nope, most of them loved The Aviator and Eternal Sunshine of The Spotless Mind. The Aviator cost $116 million to produce and grossed $102 million domestically. Eternal cost $20 million to produce; it grossed $34 million domestically. By contrast, many critics loathed Saw and The Grudge. Roeper said, “… I’m trying to stop you from even entering the theater …” when he reviewed Saw; yet, Saw, which cost $1.2 million to produce, grossed $55 million domestically. The Grudge was produced for $10 million and grossed $110 million domestically. What’s the problem? Critics like or dislike movies for a variety of reasons—cinematography, acting, directing, etc. Audiences are often apathetic to critics’ values.

Saw


Surely, the Oscars® indicate which films rack up dough at the box-office. Nope, The Aviator was nominated for best picture and Eternal won best original screenplay. Star power. No. Waterworld, Gigli and Hostage all struggled in the domestic box-office. Marketing must be the key. No. Seventy million was spent on Pearl Harbor’s marketing; $60 million was spent on The Polar Express. Both did poorly.

Hitch


The sure-fire way to guarantee a movie draws a big audience and makes lots of money … the three-act structure. Films that adhere to it do well; those that stray from it don’t. Hostage follows the structure and did poorly. The Mummy strays from the structure, dividing itself into two halves. The first part is about finding Hamunaptra; the second part is about releasing and recapturing the mummy. Pulp Fiction doesn’t follow the three-act structure. Pulp and The Mummy made big money. High concept, that’s what a film needs. Barbershop and American Beauty did great without high concepts. A suave man who gets nervous around the woman he likes and a dorky guy who takes advice from a player to win the woman of his affection is nothing new. That’s Hitch, and it cleaned up at the box-office. Hostage and The Terminal are high concept and they didn’t do well.

Long movies won’t draw crowds. Dances With Wolves did. Happy endings guarantee big crowds. Titanic and Casablanca were big in the box-office and have unhappy endings. Audiences don’t want historical or biographical films. The Passion of The Christ and A Beautiful Mind did well. Throw special effects at the crowd. Didn’t help Battlefield Earth. Make television shows into movies. The Honeymooners bombed. Remake movies. Get Carter failed. Comics make money. Hulk didn’t. Dammit! Frustrated? Ergo the common belief that no one knows anything in this industry.

There is one common denominator in movies that draw crowds and earn big bucks domestically: Motivated characters. Many of the characters have strong motivation, even some who appear in only one scene. The characters in Saw have a strong motivation to escape, or identify and capture the killer. They have different motivations in their daily lives that led Jigsaw to select them as victims. Pulp Fiction is full of characters with their own motivations. Characters visit the house in The Grudge for a variety of reasons: to have an affair, to care for an elderly woman, to burn it down. The Mummy is full of motivated characters: a brother who wants to work very little to make very much; a hero who wants to keep his word to take a woman to Hamunaptra; desert people who want to keep the mummy from being discovered; a mummy who wants to revive his true love; a woman who yearns to be recognized for her scholarly knowledge. These characters seek their motivations simultaneously or, rather, the scripts stack their motivations vertically. Million Dollar Baby—which did well at the box-office—is also full of motivated characters, including a skinny, little boxer wannabe and a poor-excuse-of-a-mother who wants to cash in on her daughter’s hard-won success. Crash did very well at the box-office and is rooted in motivated characters.

The Aviator is about one man, Howard Hughes. The people around him seem to be there only for him. They have little or no motivation. His right-hand man has kids, which have absolutely no impact on his life. Believable? No. Katharine Hepburn seems to have no motivation outside Hughes. As successful as she was in life, that doesn’t ring true. Alan Alda and Alec Baldwin play characters with some motivations; but, ultimately, their motivations seem to exist more for Hughes to exercise his motivation than to serve any other purpose. In Waterworld, all the characters, save one, seek land. The teen villains in Hostage have no apparent motivation; hence, it appears as though they act simply to put Bruce Willis’ character in an impossible situation, as demanded by the three-act structure. The Polar Express takes a lack of motivation further by casting Tom Hanks in several roles. Fun for Hanks, but not much variety for audiences; and when characters have the same identifiable voiceover, it feels like they all have the same motivation.

The Incredibles


One group has its finger on the pulse of motivation. Finding Nemo, The Incredibles, Shrek, Madagascar, Monsters, Inc.—ironically, the most realistically motivated characters are animated. Why? Today, animated films have to draw both children and adults. Children are mesmerized by the main characters and plot. Adults are hooked by parallels to the real world, such as the “AA” shark meeting in Finding Nemo or rolling blackouts in Monsters, Inc. These parallels are often provided by extraneous characters, such as a neurotic fish swimming by, frantic because he’s late for work.

Do the most popular movies over time have motivated characters, even in small roles that appear only briefly? Jaws is full of them. Back to The Future? “Save the clock tower, save the clock tower!” The Rock? Right down to a daughter so wary of meeting her convict father, she brings a friend with her. Casablanca? Every character but Rick is motivated. In fact, the story is about Rick finding motivation. Some will argue I’m not talking about motivation; I’m talking about character development. No. Motivation and character development are two different things and Rick is a perfect example. When Rick is introduced, he is highly developed—from his suave demeanor, the respect he is given, and the power he exerts effortlessly over other people. He is, however, completely unmotivated.

Certainly, many elements play a role in the domestic financial success of movies—stars, marketing, casting and so forth. But regardless of these numerous variables, it appears a film must contain motivated characters to find success in the domestic box-office. Why do audiences want motivated characters? Life is just a bunch of people motivated to achieve one or more goals. Goals change, impacted upon by other people. (Somebody else got the job or the girl.)

Will Stubbs, director of development at Davis Entertainment (I, Robot, Alien vs. Predator), reads as many as eight scripts a day. “In many of the scripts, the minor characters involved in subplots have no real purpose or motivation. Characters need to have purpose and motivation,” comments Stubbs.

Joseph Bialik, a story editor at Ballyhoo, Inc. (Seven Years in Tibet, The Opposite of Sex), elaborates, “Motivated minor characters help movies succeed because they provide challenge and drama for the lead character. Without this drama, the movie feels contrived and planned.”

More and more articles encourage streamlining scripts, writing only characters necessary to moving the plot forward. This may be the problem that is causing domestic declines in box-office revenue. By this standard, let’s say I need to buy aspirin for my sickly mother. She’ll die if she doesn’t get it. Build the suspense. I go to several drugstores before I find one with aspirin. I get home and give my mom the aspirin just in time. Whew. BORING . . and is it believable that drugstores would be out of aspirin? Instead, how about real life? When I get to the drugstore, there are six people in line ahead of me. One is bugging the cashier for cigarettes while she tries to ring someone else up. Another is on his cell phone, asking his wife what kind of detergent to buy. This slows me down in true-to-life fashion and is interesting. These characters, just like the sharks in Finding Nemo, are extraneous and their elimination doesn’t encumber the plot . . but it may encumber the film’s domestic revenue.

Motivation. It’s the difference between walking out of The Aviator saying, “It was good, but not much going on. Just the story of one guy,” and walking out of Million Dollar Baby saying, “It was good. I liked the skinny little guy who wanted to be a boxer and had no clue. Hated that greedy bitch of a mother.” Got it? Get writing.

ABOUT THIS AUTHOR
Comedian-turned-screenwriter Ian Coburn wrote two scripts-for-hire this year and is in the midst of optioning two others. His hilarious dating advice book God is a Woman: Dating Disasters by Comedian Ian Coburn, will be available in early September. It is geared for both men and women, and relives his funniest dating moments, including ones on the road working with acts such as Drew Carey and Damon Wayans. Please see www.godisawoman.net and www.iancoburn.com for more information, including pre-orders and representation.

HEART TROUBLE

by William C. Martell

BLOOD WORK opened on Friday, but didn't break any box office records. In fact, Warner Brothers was disappointed - they were expected an bigger opening weekend. As William Goldman notes in WHICH LIE DID I TELL, Eastwood has consistently been a top box office draw. Though reviews for the film are mixed, every critic seems to agree on one thing - the film is slow paced. Half the critics seem to think that's a good thing ("You don't know whether to admire the film's stately nature and call it classicism or be exasperated by a noticeable lack of pace." - Kenneth Turan, LA Times) and the other half think that's a bad thing ("The pacing is glacial, the screenplay is stiff as a board, and things heat up only in the movie's final scenes." - Ella Taylor, LA Weekly). Audiences were not mixed - most thought it was a bad thing. I'm a long time Clint Eastwood fan, I saw the movie on opening night... and I thought the film was killed by its lethargic pace.

Pacing is the heart beat of your screenplay - it's what keeps your story alive and moving. Pacing has nothing to do with the depth of your characters, the amount we care about them, or the emotional resonance of your story. All of those things are important, but have nothing to do with pacing. You can have the greatest characters in the greatest story in the world, but without a regular heart beat it will die on the page. Slow paced scripts about fascinating characters are still slow paced - but we may stick around longer to see what happens to them.

Pacing is the frequency of exciting events (heart beats) in your story as well as the spacing of those events. You want to have enough heart beats to keep yourself alive, and you want those heart beats to come on a fairly regular basis. Irregular heart rhythms are NOT a good thing. Not enough heart beats is also NOT a good thing. You don't want all of your heart beats to come at once, then go 30 minutes without any heart beat... if one extreme didn't kill your story the other extreme is sure to.

We aren't talking about just any events, here. Getting a good night's sleep is an event in my life... but not the most exciting thing to watch. Brushing my teeth, putting on my shoes, driving from point A to point B, putting away groceries, calling my mom to assure her that I've eaten my vegetables... all of these things are events in my life, but watching about 20 minutes of them in a row will probably put you to sleep. The events we're talking about are the really exciting ones - the big juicy ones. In a comedy, these will be big comedy set pieces, in an action film they are action scenes, in a drama they are the big dramatic moments that fuel your story, in a thriller they are the suspense scenes where the audience sits on the edge of their seats. The scenes that create a strong emotional response in the audience. Every emotionally charged event is a heart beat. In an action script a car chase is a heart beat, a scene where the protagonist has dinner with his partner's family is not. In a drama a dinner scene where your protagonist's father tells him he'd better shape up or he's gonna be kicked out of the house might be a heart beat. Both are dinner scenes. Genre and context are important.

Your heart rests between beats, which is why films that are all exciting scenes with nothing in between seem to burn out. Too much of a good thing. A script needs balance. Peaks and valleys. If your script is always exciting, we'll become used to the excitement and it will become expected... and boring. When car chases and shoot outs become boring, you're in real trouble! All heart beat is as much a problem as no heart beat.

The number of heart beats in your script is critical to your story's survival. It's impossible to have a regular heart beat in your story if you only have four heart beats in 105 minutes of screen time. That heart is beating so slow the patient is either comatose or dead. A few critics have said BLOOD WORK has old fashioned pacing, but pacing was NEVER that slow! if you were to compare the pacing of BLOOD WORK to the pacing of DIRTY HARRY by timing both films you'd discover that there are about three times more events in DIRTY HARRY, and many of them are action scenes. Here are the exciting events - heart beats - in BLOOD WORK: We open with a foot chase... then there's a scene where a suspect punches Clint, jumps through a window and escapes... then the next it of excitement is Clint firing a shotgun at a Ford... then we have to wait until the very end for the shoot out on the boat.

In the novel, the character goes from one crime scene to the next... but we don't see him get in the car and drive there. The next chapter starts at the next crime scene. The movie shows us him getting from one place to another! That's just bad film making. We don't need to see him driving to a location, getting out of the car, walking up to the door, entering the location... that's cutting room floor material. People own cars - that's how they get from place to place. No need to explain that. No need to kill the film's pacing with those scenes. If we remove all of the cutting room floor scenes, we automatically improve the film's pacing - less dead time between heart beats....

But we still only have four heart beats in a 105 minute film. That's past hibernation, that's dead! You're going to need about one exciting scene every ten pages - really funny scenes in a comedy, suspense scenes in a thriller, big dramatic scenes in a drama, action scenes in an action flick, etc.

Another problem with BLOOD WORK's slow pacing is that gives us plenty of time to figure out who the killer is. There isn't enough excitement to distract us, so the identity of the killer becomes obvious about a third of the way into the movie. All of those boring driving around scenes give us too much time to think about the suspects.

Plus we never feel like the red herring characters are actual suspects - there's no race against time to catch them. Another pacing problem that kills the movie! There are two characters who are red herrings - but we KNOW they aren't the real killer because the pacing doesn't increase at all. We meander towards the scene where we find out they didn't do it. As soon as we have a suspect, we should be in a race-to-catch-them mode. That makes the audience feel as if that suspect is the killer... plus focuses us on that suspect (which excludes all others). When you don't pick up the pace, the audience KNOWS this isn't the killer... and has plenty of time to think about the other suspects and figure out who IS the killer. Our heart beat should have increased when we identified a suspect, and raced until we discovered this suspect wasn't the killer.

When you're excited, your heart beat does increase... and the same is true with the pacing of your screenplay. As the story progresses you need to increase the frequency of exciting events - make the script's heart beat faster. By the time you reach Act 3 your story's heart should be racing! Pounding almost out of control! Act 3 is frequently crammed with exciting events - one leading to the next with very little space between beats. Though you can't sustain a heart beat this fast throughout your entire script, by the time we reach the end you want the audience to feel the same excitement as the protagonist. Comedy films usually feature a cavalcade of gags (check out the end to BLAZING SADDLES), rom-coms often feature a race to catch the love interest before they catch a plane to somewhere else, action films feature a string of action set pieces. Our hearts are pounding by the end of the movie!

Slow paced films - not enough heart beats - not enough exciting events happening.
Fast paced films - enough heart beats - enough exciting events happening.

To me, BLOOD WORK was anemic.

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Tuesday, November 27, 2007

Empathy and the Movies

Women looking for a movie date and filmmakers looking to increase box-office receipts both know that many men have little interest in melodramatic tearjerkers. New research, however, suggests that producers of emotional films can increase their male audience by emphasizing the films’ disconnection from reality.

“We found that when guys are told a story is fictitious, they really like it,”said Jennifer Argo, an associate marketing professor at the University of Alberta and co-author of a study (with Rui Zhu and Darren W. Dahl of the University of British Columbia) that will appear in The Journal of Consumer Research.

The researchers found that a person’s level of empathy is actually the determining factor. To test empathy levels and the subjects’ reactions to various melodramas, the researchers turned to several classic short stories, like “The Last Leaf” by O. Henry, that include struggles against adversity and melancholy plot twists.

During testing, however, the subjects were told that the stories were scripts of pilots for a coming television series. Some subjects were told that the fake scripts were based on a true story while others were advised that the tale was complete fiction.

People with low empathy (mostly men) who believed the stories to be fantasies liked them much better than tho